Friday , January 22nd

Editing a biography

Hi everyone, we are now at the editing stage. To edit means to make our work even better than it is. This is such an important part of the writing process. Even famous authors like J k Rowling will have had an editor check their writing  for mistakes. 

Tips for editing

• use a different colour pen, so you can clearly see your corrections
• read your work out loud ; it is much easier to spot any mistakes
• use the checklist below to help you - tick off the checklist as you go along

Editing checklist​​​​​​

• capital letters and full stops
• title
• sub - headings
• chronological order
• third person pronouns - she, her, they , their, 
• past tense most of the time but not always
• facts - dates, numbers
• conjunctions - time openers

Also, please watch the video from the Oak Academy website where another teacher explains the editing process. Good luck!

Thursday, 21st January

Finally, we are getting towards the end of our 1st draft. 

The final part is our conclusion, which children always find a little tricky. Do not worry;Mr Rist is here to soothe away your worries!

Top tips for your conclusion:

• make it short - no more than 2/3 sentences
• start with a conjunction - To conclude, In conclusion, To summarise
• make a general statement - why this person is famous
• justify the statement - explain why she is famous

Read my Conclusion:

To conclude, Jessica Ennis - Hill is regarded as one of the successful British athletes of all time. Even though she has struggled with serious injuries, she has won so many titles and medals in an incredible career.

If you finish the conclusion, can you act it out and draw a story map to go with. 

Wednesday, 20th January

Today, I would like you to complete paragraphs 4 and 5 , which are the paragraphs on her Junior career and Professional Career.

Tuesday, 19th January

Writing 2nd and 3rd paragraph of biography

This lesson, you are going to write the paragraph 2 and 3 of your biography. Please watch the videos, magpie some of my ideas and use your plans

Monday, 18th January

Hello wonderful Walkley children! I hope you managed to get out in the snow last week; I was bombing super fast with my sledge down some steep slopes in the heart of Sheffield.

Literacy

We are now focusing on the Talk for Writing part of our biography. Please click on the video of myself acting out the introduction. Once, you have practiced the actions, can you write your own introduction. Good luck!