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Week Beginning 1st February 2021

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Our current display in the classroom celebrates your fantastic writing! There are newspaper reports from children who sent theirs in from home and from children working in the school bubble. Well done Year 6!

Monday 1st February  

Hello Kensukes and Potters! It’s Mrs Hall here and I will be helping you write your fantastic stories this week – I can’t wait to see what great ideas you come up with!   So let’s get right to it! Our first lesson this week will be a SPAG lesson all about relative clauses.  So, what is a relative clause? Let’s find out!

 

Task 1

Have a look at the website below which tells us more about relative clauses.  Watch the video, then complete the quiz at the bottom of the screen.

https://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/topics/zwwp8mn/articles/zsrt4qt

 

Task 2

You should now know that a relative clause gives additional information about the noun (Nessie) by using a relative pronoun such as who and which.  BUT…. we will be putting them in the MIDDLE of the sentence.  This is also known as an embedded clause:-

So, for our next task, I would like you to look at the Powerpoint below.  After you become relative clause experts, please complete the activity below.  Please look at each sentence and rearrange it so that the relative pronoun (which is in brackets) and extra information clause is in the middle.  Don’t forget to put commas around the embedded clause! Because I’m so helpful, I have completed the first two for you!

 

  1. Chocolate, which originated in South America, contains feel good chemicals.
  2. The Queen, who owns several castles, is one of the richest women in the world. 

Well done everyone! You are relative clause experts!

Tuesday 2nd February

Today, we will plan our stories! Woohoo! I have included my plan so feel free to follow that plan if you would like to.  You are, of course, welcome to create your own setting and characters as well!

TASK 1

A great story needs a great main character, setting and problem!  Can you make notes under the following headings about what your story will include? I have included my own as an example. 

 

Main character

Why they are in ‘rags?’

Setting of treasure

How do they find it?

Problems faced

Resolution

- Girl called Lara

- Mum loses job

- Parents arguing about money

- Treasure in a cave next to her favourite beach

- Hears dog barking in cave so goes to investigate

- Sees the dog with a tiara in its mouth

- Follows a trail of coins to see where it leads

- Find treasure but realises she is lost

- Falls over and hurts herself

- Hears the dog barking again and follows the sound

- Find the exit to the cave

- Shows parents the treasure who are ecstatic

- Adopt the dog

 

TASK 1

Now, have a go at creating your plan using the following headings:

Introduction

Build-up

Problem

Resolution

Ending

I have included my own plan to help you.  I’m looking forward to seeing what great ideas you come up with!

I've received some excellent plans today! I can't wait to start writing our stories!

Wednesday 3rd February

Hello Year 6! Hope you are all ready today for some writing – I can’t wait to get started.  We will be writing our stories over two days – today we will be writing the introduction and the build up sections ONLY.  We will finish our stories tomorrow 

When writing today, I would like you to refer to three things:

  1. Your plan
  2. The story word mat
  3. The remember tos (you can write them out on the top of your page before you start writing)

Task 1

 

L/O: to write a narrative DAY 1

What I think

My teacher thinks

I can remember to:

Write the introduction and build up sections

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To use  a –ing openers

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To use prepositional phrases

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To use rhetorical questions to let the reader know what the MC is thinking and feeling

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To use a range of conjunctions

 

 

CHALLENGE – To use a relative clause in the middle of my sentence e.g.

Lara, who was lying on her bed, listened to her parents arguing.

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Watch the video below, then write the introduction and build up.  Please remember to refer to the 3 things I mentioned above.   Please upload the writing you have done so far below.  I would love to see them and it will also help me when recording my video for tomorrow’s writing!  I can’t wait to read them!

Y6 Write story 1

Use these documents to help you today

WOW! What fantastic writing I have received from you today! Great examples of character description e.g. chocolate-coloured eyes!

Thursday 4th February

WOW WOW WOW! What amazing stories you have sent me! I have loved reading them all so thank  you for uploading them for me to see.  Based on the writing I read yesterday, I would like you to focus on three things today:-

 

1) Using conjunctions at the start of sentences.  I talk about this in the video below in more detail. 

2) Really stretching out your descriptions and adding as much detail as possible.  It may be tempting to just tell the reader what is happening, but I would like you to really focus on adding descriptions of the setting, character and treasure. 

3) A personal target of your choice - perhaps ask an adult to suggest one or read through your writing yourself and set yourself this target.

 

Task 1

L/O: to write a narrative DAY 2

What I think

My teacher thinks

I can remember to:

Write the introduction and build up sections

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To use  a –ing openers

〇

 

To use prepositional phrases

〇

 

To use rhetorical questions to let the reader know what the MC is thinking and feeling

〇

 

To show the reader (not tell) how the characters feels 

 

 

CHALLENGE – To use conjunctions at the start of sentences e.g. however and although

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Watch the video below, then write the last two sections of your story.  We will finish writing it today. 

Y6 Write story 2

When writing today, I would like you to refer to three things:

  1. Your plan
  2. The story word mat
  3. The remember tos (you can write them out on the top of your page before you start writing)

I really enjoyed reading these stories today and even read some to my children who loved them! Thank you all so much for sending them to me, I am one very impressed and proud teacher today.

Friday 5th February

Hello Year 6s! Again, I have been so impressed with the writing I have been sent.  Thank you to all of you that shared your writing with me.  If you haven't done so yet - It's not too late! You can click on the link above to share your fabulous work with me!  

 

Today, we will be editing our first drafts of our stories.  Please ensure you have your stories with you.  Based on the writing you have sent me, we will be focusing on three things:-

 

  1. Adding commas after prepositional phrases
  2. Adding –ing sentences
  3. Adding relative clauses

 

There will be three editing challenges for you to do in the video and you will need to pause the video and complete them.   There is also an activity for you to carry out which is attached below.  Please do sent me your edited writing as I would love to see them!

Y6 edit story

Editing sheet

Some great learning I have received today!

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